STORY COMMENTS
-"destroy doohickey physically", show consequences for not doing mission
---> DEREK: electric shocks get more intense until it short-circuits
-can he liberate his fellow gorillas? (NO.)
-what can he attach himself to at present? (the mission? less pain for the brain)
-make character more active
---> actively try to trigger flashbacks after having a few accidentally set off
-show his purpose (as war machine) by showing war
--->viet nam reference (jeremy?): sneaking through jungle, gunfire and bomb noises imply war but enemies not shown
-remembers his family while dying, thinks he's going back to them but actually dying
-what are they fighting against? mission as part of a war.
-obtain freedom through death (life isn't worth living without free will)
-can't rejoin nature, ever. must die.
-is he captured as a baby or full-grown?
ENVIRONMENT COMMENTS
-jungle shouldn't be pristine
--->can contrast with flashbacks where jungle IS pristine
REFERENCE COMMENTS
-monkey king reference: band tightening on head forces him to obey master
-Dollhouse, Soldier
CHARACTER
-wants to avoid pain from electric shocks, but must endure to satisfy curiosity
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3 comments:
Thanks for posting that, Lily. I just wanted to say, character-wise, that I see him enduring the shocks less out of curiousity and more out of a need to regain something he feels is important (even though he can't remember exactly what that is).
mm, yes. I couldn't find a better word than curiosity, but yes, that's the point. we'll have to figure out how to show it.
Good notes..
Thats pretty much all of it.
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