Sorry I havent been around much this past week - I have been feeling kind shitty as of late.
Between naps and tylenol intakes I have been busy working on my scenes as planned.
Here is some of what I have done the last few days:
(I will bring everything in for sweatbox monday)
First I re-thumbnailed the post-explosion scenes that I have - to create a better flow between them after removing the scene where archer looks at his arm.
Here is what I have:
Archer wakes up under tank.
He frees himself from under tank.
Archer walks a step forward - pauses.
Archer turns and looks around.
Truck-out to post-explosion destruction.
cut back to Archer, he turns.
Looks at Tank.
CU of tank as his implant fades..
cut back to archer looking down at tank.
he reaches up and touches his implant..
and gets shocked/hurt.
Let me know what you think..
second to show is the rough layout and line test of the truck-out/post-explosion scene:
Next is a rough layout for the over-head shot of Archer and the soldier.
And finally a rough sketch of the waterfall with the mountains based off the photo and rough layouts I have seen thus far. Any suggestions would be appreciated, I have a different sketch thats cleaner that I still have to scan as well.
He frees himself from under tank.
Archer walks a step forward - pauses.
Archer turns and looks around.
Truck-out to post-explosion destruction.
cut back to Archer, he turns.
Looks at Tank.
CU of tank as his implant fades..
cut back to archer looking down at tank.
he reaches up and touches his implant..
and gets shocked/hurt.
Let me know what you think..
second to show is the rough layout and line test of the truck-out/post-explosion scene:
Next is a rough layout for the over-head shot of Archer and the soldier.
And finally a rough sketch of the waterfall with the mountains based off the photo and rough layouts I have seen thus far. Any suggestions would be appreciated, I have a different sketch thats cleaner that I still have to scan as well.
Any comments and suggestions would be appreciated - I will have it all to show for critique tomorrow as well.
Later Daze Guys and Gals!
3 comments:
Thanks for posting Angel! good too see how it is all progressing-
I think a lot is working here, though for posting size I will just mention potential changes that we can discuss tomorrow.
I love the angle in panel 13 after the dead tank CU but the CU of tanks face should be rotated (kind of like it is in the leica) it appears like tank is way behind him for this angle.
In frame 16 and 17 is he moving his head to screen right while the implant is bugging him? if so that is good as I we can cut on that action in my shot. (keep his back end in mind though, I know its a thumbnail but you would see it in this shot)
As for the truck out shot, nice test- I might even have it start closer (where the cut off currently is) so there is more to reveal. And as for M shape in the foreground, maybe have him bent up over the rock on the left to complete the visual loop instead of taking your eye off screen. And round off butches back so it goes above the log behind him and makes his shape less like archers.
Nice work on the last shot! looks good to me, its gonna be a hefty paint job lol- Just looking between it and the down shot of the falls. The down shot might be too straight, perhaps angle it in at the bottom to make more of a C shape. And I dont think I would have the branches/rock on the right (of you want something to break it up, maybe something in the extreme foreground blurred (as though the camera was over in a tree zoomed in on the scene.
Keep in mind where the rock is in that final zoomed out shot, It looks like you might have drawn it over on the right, have they really traveled across the whole plateau? having come from the left side. I almost saw it either in that middle dent, or to the left of it-
We can discuss it all more tomorrow! thanks again for the post Angel
thanks alot Nate!
I have already started to take your comments into consideration - I will show you the results tomorrow.
nice progress! I won't be leaving a massive book like nathandale, but I must say I dig the thumbnailed sequence. also, for the downshot of the waterfall, I agree with nate about it being too straight. I'd also give it a gradient on the way down, perhaps disappearing into mist, but you could do that in photoshop of course!
good stuff, thanks for posting!
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